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  • per gemini;

    1. The Shift from Metaphor to Narrative

    The first half of your text is about media consumption (vinyl records, planning, and ceremony). The second half shifts into the internal logic of the story (the Fellowship, the threat of Sauron, and the isolation).

    The Break: You transition from talking about watching a movie to being in the world of Middle-earth. These are two different "modes" of thought that deserve their own space.
    
    1. Rhetorical Escalation

    You start with a cozy, nostalgic tone (“part of the charm,” “mini-ceremony”) and end with a very dark, visceral description of being hunted and alone.

    The Impact: By keeping them in one paragraph, the dark intensity of the ending feels rushed. Splitting the paragraph allows the reader to reset their emotional state as the stakes of your argument get higher.
    
    1. The “Theme” Pivot

    The sentence “But it struck me that it’s the kind of story that should seem like it takes forever” acts as a bridge.

    The Logic: In a well-structured essay, this sentence would either end the first paragraph or begin the second. Keeping it in the middle of a giant block hides the most important intellectual "click" of your argument.
    
    1. Visual “Breathing Room”

    Ironically, while you argue that the movies should feel like a long struggle, a piece of writing should generally avoid being a struggle to read.

    The Reader's Experience: Without a paragraph break, the reader’s eye has no place to rest. They might skim the middle sections, missing your nuanced points about the Fellowship breaking up or the feeling of being alone in a crowd.
    










  • first, id like to say… fuck plex. friends dont let friends use plex.

    that said, im the guy youre talkin about. i have a massive personal video library i push into a front-end that i share with friends and family… even some coworkers.

    the fact is, storage is very cheap now… throw in the very mature applications for obtaining/servicing the stuff stored therein it becomes trivial for guys like me to spread the wealth.

    data hoarders are people that dont appreciate having to rely on other people for our shit… streaming? only from our own servers. there are lots of us